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For now I cleanse my heart with tears
That Good and Evil fruits impart
Through Knowledge culled from human years,
The trees from which all sufferings start.

As God within me wakes my heart,
My heart awakens inside God;
A spark in infinite dark his art
Shall draw like lightning to the rod.

And burning human pride’s facade,
I’ll sear and singe, a martyred saint;
And with the martyr’s fervor, prod
And press until I’m sacrosanct;

In fearful furnaces distraint,
My soul will smolder as it nears
The white of lightning; and I’ll faint,
Saved only then by God’s own tears.
Written by Frank Jaspers.

This isn't a specific poetic form. The rhyme scheme is Abab bcbc cdcd eaeA. 
I thought it worked well for the poem. 

The idea for this poem came from Dostoyevsky who said "Suffering is the origin of consciousness."
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BlizzardBlitzer Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2017   Writer
There's a lot here for me.  To describe it all would use up several times over the text used to create your poem.  It really impresses me when I see so much meaning in just a few stanzas.  And it was succinct, too.  It didn't roam around vaguely like so many do.
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Frank-Jaspers Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2017  Professional Writer
Glad you appreciate it so deeply!
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BlizzardBlitzer Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2017   Writer
So am I.
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MrSkittlesXD Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Mesmerizing words
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Frank-Jaspers Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2017  Professional Writer
Thank you!
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MrSkittlesXD Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome.
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Simply beautifully done :heart:!
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Frank-Jaspers Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2017  Professional Writer
Thanks stranger! :)
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
haha, surely! :)  (I'm not around all that much these days ^^ )
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Frank-Jaspers Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2017  Professional Writer
Yeah, I've noticed you've been a bit awol. 
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SerenAletheia Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
WOW. Honest to God, this is completely true. And you said it in such a breathtaking way.
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Frank-Jaspers Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2017  Professional Writer
Thanks. I appreciate your comments a lot.
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SerenAletheia Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure. I always enjoy your writing. :)
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MensjeDeZeemeermin Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2017
Very intense, passionate (even Byronic), forceful, graced by artifice.
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Frank-Jaspers Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2017  Professional Writer
That is a great compliment! 
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haijinik Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2017  Student Writer
damn! well paced and amazingly worded. the rhymes ride that line between cadence-inducing and flowing that is what all we poets strive for. great work!

that being said, how do you feel about collaboration?
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Frank-Jaspers Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2017  Professional Writer
Thanks for your kind words. 

I did a collaboration with serendiipitii.deviantart.com/ a month ago that was interesting; although, to be honest, it was more her work than my own. She collected parts of various poems and collated them into a single piece. 

Collaborations can be very good learning experiences. 
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haijinik Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2017  Student Writer
what i said was the truth...it happened to be kind :) as to collaboration: if you are ever interested, speak up. i love collaborating, and i feel our styles and perspectives might just mesh together well.
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Ambruno Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i liked it alot... well done
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Frank-Jaspers Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2017  Professional Writer
Thanks!
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